Author: thephoenix Posted: Wed Feb 03, 2010 7:54 am (GMT -8) per capita consumption of cigarettes in California declined from over 125 packs annually per person to about 60, a drop more than twice as great as ==> The starting phrase “A decade…program” requires a nown just after the comma, moreover “per capita consumption” and “per person” are repetition. B) annual per capita consumption of cigarettes in California declined from over 125 packs to about 60, more than twice as great as that ==> The starting phrase “A decade…program” requires a nown just after the comma

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Sentence Correction :: RE: antismoking program